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Brief:
I was asked to review and edit a tech startup's application for Y Combinator, a startup accelerator that helps new companies secure funding. It was important that the application use American English and convey a professional, yet relatively informal TOV. Included is an excerpt of the original text, followed by my edit. Changes are shown.
Copy (original):
We're building a computer vision system that helps industrial managers to monitor their production output. The value is in transparency of the production process and resulting output for the managers, even when they're not on site. It provides detailed vision of every item produced and large-scale analysis. The system identifies individual items on the production line, counts them and looks for anomalies. It keeps record of all inspected items, provides analytics for data-driven optimization and visual proof to investigate quality issues or customer complaints. The system is designed to be easy to install out-of-the-box by the end user, and fit most discreet manufacturing lines.
Team: The team has 15 years experiece in AI consulting and industrial manufacturing. AB InBev, Siemens, Boston Sceintific, VW, GM, Peugeot-Citroen, Intel, GE. Product: Proof of concept, including image capture, segmentation, preprocessing, anomaly detection, hardware and installation design Implementations: a pilot integration on the production line of a major beverage manufacturer. Partnerships: strategic cooperation with a major industrial computers manufacturer; strategic partnership with NVIDIA (Elite partner status).
All founders have been working on the system for three years, one of the founders - full time since Sept 2020 (engineering the system on-site, managing the development team, working with the customer)
Copy (edited):
We're building a computer vision system that helps industrial managers monitor their production output. Its value is in the transparency of the production process and the resulting output for managers, even when they're not on site. It provides detailed supervision of every item produced and large-scale analyses. The system identifies individual items on a production line, counts them, and looks for anomalies. It also keeps a record of all inspected items and provides analytics for data-driven optimization and visual proof to investigate quality issues or customer complaints. The system is designed to be easy to install out-of-the-box by the end user, and it fits most discreet manufacturing lines.
Team: Our team has over 15 years’ experience in AI consulting and industrial manufacturing. We have collaborated with such companies as AB InBev, Siemens, Boston Scientific, VW, GM, Peugeot-Citroen, Intel, and GE. Product: Proof of concept, including image capture, segmentation, preprocessing, anomaly detection, hardware, and installation design Implementations: A pilot integration on the production line of a major beverage manufacturer. Partnerships: Strategic cooperation with a major industrial computers manufacturer; a strategic partnership with NVIDIA (Elite partner status).
All of our founders have been working on the system for three years, with one of them in a full-time capacity since Sept 2020 (engineering the system on-site, managing the development team, and working with the customer).
I was asked to review and edit a tech startup's application for Y Combinator, a startup accelerator that helps new companies secure funding. It was important that the application use American English and convey a professional, yet relatively informal TOV. Included is an excerpt of the original text, followed by my edit. Changes are shown.
Copy (original):
We're building a computer vision system that helps industrial managers to monitor their production output. The value is in transparency of the production process and resulting output for the managers, even when they're not on site. It provides detailed vision of every item produced and large-scale analysis. The system identifies individual items on the production line, counts them and looks for anomalies. It keeps record of all inspected items, provides analytics for data-driven optimization and visual proof to investigate quality issues or customer complaints. The system is designed to be easy to install out-of-the-box by the end user, and fit most discreet manufacturing lines.
Team: The team has 15 years experiece in AI consulting and industrial manufacturing. AB InBev, Siemens, Boston Sceintific, VW, GM, Peugeot-Citroen, Intel, GE. Product: Proof of concept, including image capture, segmentation, preprocessing, anomaly detection, hardware and installation design Implementations: a pilot integration on the production line of a major beverage manufacturer. Partnerships: strategic cooperation with a major industrial computers manufacturer; strategic partnership with NVIDIA (Elite partner status).
All founders have been working on the system for three years, one of the founders - full time since Sept 2020 (engineering the system on-site, managing the development team, working with the customer)
Copy (edited):
We're building a computer vision system that helps industrial managers monitor their production output. Its value is in the transparency of the production process and the resulting output for managers, even when they're not on site. It provides detailed supervision of every item produced and large-scale analyses. The system identifies individual items on a production line, counts them, and looks for anomalies. It also keeps a record of all inspected items and provides analytics for data-driven optimization and visual proof to investigate quality issues or customer complaints. The system is designed to be easy to install out-of-the-box by the end user, and it fits most discreet manufacturing lines.
Team: Our team has over 15 years’ experience in AI consulting and industrial manufacturing. We have collaborated with such companies as AB InBev, Siemens, Boston Scientific, VW, GM, Peugeot-Citroen, Intel, and GE. Product: Proof of concept, including image capture, segmentation, preprocessing, anomaly detection, hardware, and installation design Implementations: A pilot integration on the production line of a major beverage manufacturer. Partnerships: Strategic cooperation with a major industrial computers manufacturer; a strategic partnership with NVIDIA (Elite partner status).
All of our founders have been working on the system for three years, with one of them in a full-time capacity since Sept 2020 (engineering the system on-site, managing the development team, and working with the customer).
The quick brown fox jumps over the lazy dog
Buffalo buffalo Buffalo buffalo buffalo buffalo Buffalo buffalo
James, while John had had "had", had had "had had"; "had had" had had a better effect on the teacher
A ship-shipping ship shipping shipping ships
That that exists exists in that that that that exists exists in
When you wait for the waiter, do you not become the waiter
Brief:
A non-profit asked me to review and edit their monthly publication on the organization's activities. As the content included many mentions of various cultures, countries, and historical sites, it was vital that proper spelling and respectful usage was applied to all terms used. Included is an excerpt of the original text, followed by my edit. Changes are shown.
Copy (original):
Sessions of the Committee review the reports on the state of conservation of the World Heritage properties, decide on the inscription of new cultural and natural sites on the World Heritage List, and consider other issues related to the Convention’s implementation.
In 2019, over 2,500 representatives from more than 180 countries gathered together at Baku Congress Centre, the largest multifunctional complex in the Caucasus. The excellent arrangements made to organize this significant international event are worth noting. These include the well thought-out business and cultural programs, as well as the Azerbaijan’s customs of hospitality that created a great impression on all the participants. The colorful and memorable opening ceremony gave the guests an opportunity to enjoy the richness of the country’s intangible cultural legacy, and the concert by the Azerbaijan’s masters of arts left no one indifferent.
One of the core issues attracting the keen interest of the international community during the annual sessions of the World Heritage Committee is the inscription of new sites on the World Heritage List. This event is a matter of great importance for each State Party to the 1972 Convention. As a rule, considerable human and material resources are involved in the processes of preparing the nomination dossiers for the candidate sites and ensuring methodological support throughout the procedure of entering the prestigious international list.
Copy (edited):
Each sSessions of the Committee reviews the reports on the state of conservation forof the World Heritage properties, decides on the inductioninscription of new cultural and natural sites intoon the World Heritage List, and considers other issues related to the Convention’s implementation.
In 2019, over 2,500 representatives from more than 180 countries gathered together at the Baku Congress Centre, the largest multi-functional complex in the Caucasus. The excellent arrangements made to organize this significant international event are worth noting. These include the well thought-out business and cultural programs, as well as the Azerbaijan’s customs of hospitality, whichthat leftcreated a great impression on all the participants. The colorful and memorable opening ceremony gave the guests an opportunity to enjoy the richness of the country’s intangible cultural legacy, and the concert by several of the Azerbaijan’s masters of arts left no one indifferent.
One of the core issues attracting the keen interest of the international community during the annual sessions of the World Heritage Committee is the inductioninscription of new sites intoon the World Heritage List. This event is a matter of great importance for each State Party to the 1972 Convention. As a rule, considerable human and material resources are involved in the processes of preparing the nomination dossiers for the potentialcandidate sites, and ensuring methodological support throughout the procedure of entering the prestigious international list.
A non-profit asked me to review and edit their monthly publication on the organization's activities. As the content included many mentions of various cultures, countries, and historical sites, it was vital that proper spelling and respectful usage was applied to all terms used. Included is an excerpt of the original text, followed by my edit. Changes are shown.
Copy (original):
Sessions of the Committee review the reports on the state of conservation of the World Heritage properties, decide on the inscription of new cultural and natural sites on the World Heritage List, and consider other issues related to the Convention’s implementation.
In 2019, over 2,500 representatives from more than 180 countries gathered together at Baku Congress Centre, the largest multifunctional complex in the Caucasus. The excellent arrangements made to organize this significant international event are worth noting. These include the well thought-out business and cultural programs, as well as the Azerbaijan’s customs of hospitality that created a great impression on all the participants. The colorful and memorable opening ceremony gave the guests an opportunity to enjoy the richness of the country’s intangible cultural legacy, and the concert by the Azerbaijan’s masters of arts left no one indifferent.
One of the core issues attracting the keen interest of the international community during the annual sessions of the World Heritage Committee is the inscription of new sites on the World Heritage List. This event is a matter of great importance for each State Party to the 1972 Convention. As a rule, considerable human and material resources are involved in the processes of preparing the nomination dossiers for the candidate sites and ensuring methodological support throughout the procedure of entering the prestigious international list.
Copy (edited):
Each sSessions of the Committee reviews the reports on the state of conservation forof the World Heritage properties, decides on the inductioninscription of new cultural and natural sites intoon the World Heritage List, and considers other issues related to the Convention’s implementation.
In 2019, over 2,500 representatives from more than 180 countries gathered together at the Baku Congress Centre, the largest multi-functional complex in the Caucasus. The excellent arrangements made to organize this significant international event are worth noting. These include the well thought-out business and cultural programs, as well as the Azerbaijan’s customs of hospitality, whichthat leftcreated a great impression on all the participants. The colorful and memorable opening ceremony gave the guests an opportunity to enjoy the richness of the country’s intangible cultural legacy, and the concert by several of the Azerbaijan’s masters of arts left no one indifferent.
One of the core issues attracting the keen interest of the international community during the annual sessions of the World Heritage Committee is the inductioninscription of new sites intoon the World Heritage List. This event is a matter of great importance for each State Party to the 1972 Convention. As a rule, considerable human and material resources are involved in the processes of preparing the nomination dossiers for the potentialcandidate sites, and ensuring methodological support throughout the procedure of entering the prestigious international list.
The quick brown fox jumps over the lazy dog
Buffalo buffalo Buffalo buffalo buffalo buffalo Buffalo buffalo
James, while John had had "had", had had "had had"; "had had" had had a better effect on the teacher
A ship-shipping ship shipping shipping ships
That that exists exists in that that that that exists exists in
When you wait for the waiter, do you not become the waiter
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